The dreams were a very nice touch!-Reading on
Well done! It lookslike the plot is coming along very nicely! -Reading on
The vacation was a great idea, however I am waiting for this 'program' twist - Reading on
The emotional development of Sam is very intresting and makes for great reading, again your exicution of the chapter has impressed me. -Reading on
This is a well writen Kheb episode, however in the chapter I would have linked it revalance to the story, or are you just telling the story over time? if so use creative transitions to help smooth the chapter breaks over. Other wise, very well done! -Reading On
Nothing new, great jpb on ligistics but relivancy is key! Transition, but the rest is very well done! - Reading on
Hizza the plot reveals itself again! Again, a well writen chapter, that also explains the previous. A sugestion could be made about melding the two chapters togeather for a more coherient thought proccess but I like what you have done none the less, well done! -Reading on
Short sweet and to the point! I love it! - Reading on
Love the emotional upheval in Jack, yet how are you going to play it out? - Reading on
Ahhhh intresting relationship twists, I love it.....-Reading on
Very nice!, dreamy impresionistic POV via Sam that alows us to see into her mind. Thank you, it is a very well writen pice! Pelase keep writing!
I am in love with the plot! You have done such a great job with the characters! The only sugestion i can make is to watch your pronouns, they are a little confusing somtimes. You have tallent that is breath taking, so I will read on...
Author's Response:
Yes, I know the pronoun issue. My beta reader corects that, but I guess sometines they do slip her attention too. I'm glad youlike the story though. Thank you!
Totaly cool! I'll keep reading!
Author's Response: Glad you like it. Thank you.
Very well done! I love what you have done with the story thus far!
Author's Response: I hope the rest will be just as pleasing. thank you.
Very Moving! I'll read on...
Author's Response: Thank you, please do...
Author's Response: Thank you, please do...
Pra-vo! I Love it, and I'll read on....
Author's Response: Thank you. Please enjoy the rest.
Very well done, I'll read on because as you have said, the story continues! Then, I do as well....
Author's Response: Wonderful there's still stuff to be read.... And smut as well..... Have fun.
Very moving! I'll read on..
Author's Response: I'm glad youlike the emotional side of it. Hope youlike the rest.
I am so happy, Yes I am! Damn you GOOD! Twists are you specality! I'll keep reading....
Author's Response: Not really, but this whole fic seemed to be...... something else.... I am quite cliche and predictable really.... I plead insanity and some sort of possession to explain how this fic came out to be so...... different..... It was the voices!!! They told me to do things..... *nods*
Pra-vo! Well done! I'll read on....
Author's Response: Thank you thank you, please enjoy....
Very well played plot line and development of characters. I would have liked an actually "yes", but that is what sets us appart as writers....YOU have done a great job, keep writing and amazing us with you tallent and imagination!
Author's Response: I actually find the whole marriage proposal scene painfully cliche (unlike the rest of my fic *cough*) So I went for a bit of "variation" on the yes answer.... I'm glad youliked i.And awww.... you think I have imagination.... *sniffle* how sweet is that.... *sniffle* that's just..... touching..... *sniffle* Thank you.
Can't wait for more....
She needed to stay alive to tell him it was not his fault
Good addition!
Author's Response:
Thank you, I wrote it cause someone said the story lacked smut. So I wrote cheesy smut
Thus far this is a very intriguing story! Reading on...
Author's Response:
This chapter was supposed to be the whole story. I wrote it as a drabble with an open ending, but people asked for more
Very well written, again, reading on...
Author's Response:
After I wrote chapter 2 I had to write chapter 3